Welcome back. The last video said that it's feelings that matter in motion, not what people do. In this video, we're going to take our first look at how that works in practice. One of the problems with ghostwriter like me who wants to pass on tips about how to write a novel is that we can't use extracts from the books we go through it and through other people. When you sign a contract to ghostwriter book, the contract includes a nondisclosure agreement that says you can never talk about any of the books you've written as though you were the writer. What that means is I'm going to have to use examples from my own books.

But before I do that, here's an example from the writer Caroline Graham. Caroline Graham as an English writer, she wrote a series of books about a fictional police station in a fictional town called midsummer. Although in fact, mid summer is a series of fictional villages why of her characters was Detective Sergeant Troy. When the books became the basis of a British TV series Midsomer Murders, Sergeant Troy was presented as a new man, capital N, capital M. He was single, he was sensitive to the needs of women. Many women were attracted to him, and he showed commendable restraint in how he dealt with them. That's not how Caroline grow them presented Sergeant Troy in the books, in the books, Troy is married and yet he pursues every woman he meets, and he does it in a really sexist way.

One of the most informative rereading scenes in the books comes when Troy is having sex with his wife. I use the expression having sex, because you couldn't possibly describe what's going on as making love. So how does Caroline Graham present this she doesn't describe any sexual activity at all. Beyond telling us that Troy and his wife are in bed, that Troy is carrying the memory of a meeting with a female witness he found attractive, but who rejected him out of hand, and that this has made Troy feel Randy the key point in the scene comes when Troy says to his wife while engaged in the sex act, you don't need to wake up if you don't want to. The writer hasn't described anything that they're doing. She hasn't told us whether Troy's lifted his wives nicely, or she's taken it off.

She hasn't even told us whether they've kissed but in only 11 words, you don't need to wake up if you don't want to. She's told us everything we need to know in complete detail about the relationship between Troy and his wife and Troy's attitude, both to her as a person and to women in general. It's a tour de force, a brilliant piece of writing by a writer in complete control. of her craft. I learned from it, and so can you. In the next video, we'll be looking at an extract from a book that shows a watch much warmer and more affectionate relationship between a young man and a young woman.

But there's still no actual description of what we're doing. I'll see you there.